It's good, music works well. It does need to be lowered during the conversation. '30 minutes later' credit isn't really needed. The Reservoir Dogs walk is good but a bit long and put some actors credits rather than characters. Good though.
Good use of music however your voices may need to be filmed again some words a mumbled. I think that the 30min ellipsis is a bit unneeded. The slow motion walking scene is good but i don't think you need to two shots of you walking that come before.
i like the opening titles and music. The "30 minutes later" isn't needed and the slow-motion walk goes on for to long. Also the names of your characters should be replaced by actor names seeing as it is an opening sequence.
I agree that the 30 minutes and meanwhile bits aren't needed and don't match the style - just cross-dissolve or fade to black. The slow motion at the end could be cut a bit too. I agree that you need actor not character names. But otherwise this is really, really good!
It's very good, keep going! The Production ident is good, well done. I agree with a lot of the comments above andalso the sound in the roof conversation is a bit quiet, you might need to get them to say it again or put the volume up. I really like the opening bit with him going up the stairs.
This is good, well done. I didn't like the 30 minutes thing, although the sound effect is good, b ut it's too cartoon for the piece. I like teh rest though, although you can hear it was windy outside.
I think you're doing well and not far off finished. i think the character names is more like a trailer so change to actor names. And maybe record some dialogue again. Well done though and good luck!
Well done, you look like you'vre been working hard! I like it and it seems thought out! I just think the scene on the roof has some strange shots of the boss character as he seems not framed??
Like everyone has said, cut some of the slo mo sequence and take out the 30 seconds later stuff (or put them over the action, that would be better) but it's good and i like it.
It was a good location shehan, you are lucky. Costume is good as well, so you should get good marks for all that stuff. Agree about volume of convo and wind noise, rerecord if you can. i like the firelight logo, that works well. The opening credits a bit fussy though?
What everyone else said, basically, especially about the 30 minutes. If you really want it, put it over the action but it's better just to fade or something or use a location name.
It's good, music works well. It does need to be lowered during the conversation. '30 minutes later' credit isn't really needed. The Reservoir Dogs walk is good but a bit long and put some actors credits rather than characters. Good though.
ReplyDeleteGood use of music however your voices may need to be filmed again some words a mumbled.
ReplyDeleteI think that the 30min ellipsis is a bit unneeded.
The slow motion walking scene is good but i don't think you need to two shots of you walking that come before.
James
i like the opening titles and music. The "30 minutes later" isn't needed and the slow-motion walk goes on for to long. Also the names of your characters should be replaced by actor names seeing as it is an opening sequence.
ReplyDeletemichael
I agree that the 30 minutes and meanwhile bits aren't needed and don't match the style - just cross-dissolve or fade to black. The slow motion at the end could be cut a bit too. I agree that you need actor not character names. But otherwise this is really, really good!
ReplyDeleteSteph
It's very good, keep going! The Production ident is good, well done. I agree with a lot of the comments above andalso the sound in the roof conversation is a bit quiet, you might need to get them to say it again or put the volume up. I really like the opening bit with him going up the stairs.
ReplyDeleteJess
This is good, well done. I didn't like the 30 minutes thing, although the sound effect is good, b ut it's too cartoon for the piece. I like teh rest though, although you can hear it was windy outside.
ReplyDeleteErin
Like the music, agree with pretty much everything they've said so far. John
ReplyDeleteAgree about too much slow mo and sound problems but i do think it's a good idea and generally your editing is good.
ReplyDeleteSarah
I think you're doing well and not far off finished. i think the character names is more like a trailer so change to actor names. And maybe record some dialogue again. Well done though and good luck!
ReplyDeleteHollie
Everyone is saying about the 30 minutes so i wont say it again but i agree! V good otherwise, how did you get on a high building?!
ReplyDeleteRobert
we just asked, if we could use the roof top of our science building
Deleteshehan
Very good, good style and the characters are clear but dialogue needs sorting out up and down in volume and camera fuzz.
ReplyDeleteharry
Well done, you look like you'vre been working hard! I like it and it seems thought out! I just think the scene on the roof has some strange shots of the boss character as he seems not framed??
ReplyDeleteRachel
Very good so far, i pretty much agree with what everyone else said. Mikey
ReplyDeleteHi, i think it's good and it works well together. Agree about slo mo and sound stuff but like the idea.
ReplyDeleteJonas
Looking good so far, any improvements needed have already been mentioned but otherwise I can't fault it
ReplyDeleteLike everyone has said, cut some of the slo mo sequence and take out the 30 seconds later stuff (or put them over the action, that would be better) but it's good and i like it.
ReplyDeleteFarrell
It was a good location shehan, you are lucky. Costume is good as well, so you should get good marks for all that stuff. Agree about volume of convo and wind noise, rerecord if you can. i like the firelight logo, that works well. The opening credits a bit fussy though?
ReplyDeleteCaitlin
It's good, it feels the right style, just sort out the conversation bit, but very good. It's supposed to be a bit funny i think?
ReplyDeleteGemma
What everyone else said, basically, especially about the 30 minutes. If you really want it, put it over the action but it's better just to fade or something or use a location name.
ReplyDeleteIsla
I think its supposed to be funny like Gemma, not reservoir dogs? Or is it a mix? The man on the roof is more comic style than the ending bit.
ReplyDeleteLiam
Its good. Dialogue repeats a bit on roof but good editing mostly, some lighting problems because of sky.
ReplyDeleteBen
I think its a mix of funny and serious.
ReplyDeletejake
I agree its a mix of funny and serious. Agree about too much walking at end and no intertitles. i like the locations and costumes too.
ReplyDeleteBilly
I think everyone said it all - well done. your doing well.
ReplyDeleteShannon
I think this will be good if you just change the things everyone said. Keep going.
ReplyDeleteHarriet